Intriguing concept to do vignettes for each of the hours - short stories within a short story. I like it. Again, your writing is strong in showcasing the narrator’s emotions - it pulls the reader right in and makes one want to read more. This narrator feels very androgynous to me; what do you think about changing the name from Eleanor to a more gender ambiguous name? It might make more readers identify with the narrator?? Please keep writing. I’m enjoying reading your work; looking forward to each new piece.
"... watch the steaming liquid pour into the paper goblet" has to be a top 5 turn of phrase all time
Intriguing concept to do vignettes for each of the hours - short stories within a short story. I like it. Again, your writing is strong in showcasing the narrator’s emotions - it pulls the reader right in and makes one want to read more. This narrator feels very androgynous to me; what do you think about changing the name from Eleanor to a more gender ambiguous name? It might make more readers identify with the narrator?? Please keep writing. I’m enjoying reading your work; looking forward to each new piece.
I also wasn't sure the gender of the narrator! Kind of a cool concept for a self-insert